Before & after library
Business emails
Follow-up email to a prospect
A real-world business emails rewrite, broken down across the five dimensions our engine optimizes for.
Before
Hi John, I hope this email finds you well. I wanted to circle back and touch base regarding our previous conversation. Please let me know your thoughts at your earliest convenience.
After
Hi John — quick follow-up on the proposal we sent Tuesday. Any questions I can answer, or would a 15-minute call this week be easier?
What the rewrite changed
A five-dimensional breakdown — the same lens the engine applies to every draft.
- Readability
- From 'difficult' to 'plain English' — sentence length cut by half.
- Tone
- Warm and direct, replacing performative pleasantries with a real offer.
- Rhythm
- Two short sentences create a sense of decisive momentum.
- Audience resonance
- Names a specific next step the reader can act on without thinking.
- Clarity
- Removes hedging; the ask is explicit and easy.
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